Title: Untitled Horror Project Format: Novel (Opening Scene) Page Length: ~1 page Genres: Psychological Horror / Atmospheric Horror
Logline: A loving teacher and mother’s life slowly collapses after a tragic accident destroys the safety of her world, while strange tapping and whispers seem to follow moments of loss.
Feedback Concerns: Does the opening create tension or intrigue? Does the tapping/whisper hook you as a reader? Is the family moment effective before the horror begins?
Hi everyone, I am new to writing and have wrote an opening to a horror book and would really love some feedback please
Tap…
Tap. Tap…
Tap. Tap. Tap…
A whisper.
“Be… behind… behind you…”
Silence.
Birdsong breaks the quiet as morning light spills through the bedroom window.
Sarah stirs.
Moments later her alarm erupts beside the bed. She groans softly, stretches, and reaches over to silence it. For a moment she lies still, staring out at the pale morning sky. An arm slips around her waist, pulling her closer. “Morning,” Matt murmurs, his voice rough with sleep. Sarah turns to face him. His eyes are still closed. Long blond-red hair falls across the pillow, his thick beard making him look almost Viking-like. She studies his face for a moment.
BANG!
The bedroom door flies open. Small feet thunder across the wooden floor. “MUMMY! DADDY!” Willow launches herself onto the bed. Matt jolts awake and catches her mid-jump. “Whoa!”
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