​Story that I am working on

This is closet drama that I’ve been having fun working on, feel free to share your thoughts.

Underground Cellar

(Lord McNeal’s Mansion)

Greckor and Larry finish discussing urgent matters. An 11 year old boy, Luke is at the far end of the cellar on the floor. His arms, legs and mouth are tied

Larry: Things have settled, the Watch is off our backs

Greckor: Good! And my daughter?

Larry avoids making eye contact and his voice lightens

Larry: Eh, we have to confirm a sighting

Greckor: Your men can’t confirm if they saw a gaudy 11-year old?

Larry stumbles with his words

Larry: A lot is being asked of them right now

Greckor: Remind me Larry, how much are you and the men being paid for this?

Larry: Alright, alright! Jeez…

Larry: We think she’s on St Augstin’s roof

Greckor: WHAT?!

(pause)

Greckor loosens up

Greckor: Your men didn’t prevent this from happening?

makes eye contact

Larry: It was chaos out there! Not a soul saw her make the climb

Greckor: Get her down!

Larry looks away and responds almost sarcasticly

Larry: Climbing those walls will attract some attention

Greckor: Find a way!

A boy across the room begins coughing. The boy’s mouth, arms and foot are tied as they laid on the floor.

Greckor and Larry take notice immediately.

(under his beath)

Larry: Kid’s been nothing but trouble

Larry: I’ll get the zigmat

Greckor: No

Greckor walks over to the table where an enormous rectangular shield lay

Larry: We can’t contain him when he’s awake

A door behind them opens abruptly, and Henry, Greckor’s right hand, walks through the door but doesn’t close it

Henry: Larry, your contact is not cooperating. You’re the one that’s going to have to convince him

Greckor picks up the shield with both hands

Greckor: Is there a problem?

Henry: This boy’s havoc, has made all the merchants uneasy. Right now they’ll only work with people they know

Looks at Larry

Greckor: They’ve taken the money and looked the other way countless times. How is this situation any different

gets technical, then rolls his eyes

Henry: It’s not just the money with these guys. They’re a fraternity.

Henry: One of their big shots got rattled and left town. Caused a bit of a stir among them. They kept it quiet but word travels.

Focus on Larry

Greckor: You gave me your word, that these merchants would secure a way out for us if the city was sealed shut

Greckor: And now I hear this!?

Larry: How could my plan ever account for magic?

Greckor: Get me results or I pay Dijiiri all the remaining funds allocated to you and your men

Turns to Henry

Greckor: Bring me Dijiiri

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